It’s my first time, please be gentle and thank you Jade for the beautiful photo. Here goes…
Colin and Brenda walked up towards the front door. She looked up at the steps and Brenda’s face dropped, her pulse began to race and she started to breathe heavily.
“Bren Dear, what’s the matter?” asked Colin, realising and regretting as soon as he posed the question.
She was starting to sweat and was gripping his hand tighter and tighter. Her hand was starting to slip with sweat on his wrist but she dug her nails like tines into his flesh.
“I’ll, erm, replace the window pane and I’ll repave the steps”, he was playing for time.
Brenda was shaking now, grip tightening and an odd gurgling sound emanating from her throat.
A spot of blood dripped from Colin’s heavily scarred wrist, and he grimaced.
There we are; 125 words, not sure why I wrote that, more like a stream of consciousness really!
Very interesting! And opens up a lot of questions, particularly, what was bothering Brenda so badly? What is the significance of the window pane??
Great writing for your first time! ^_^
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Thanks Jade, Brenda likes order and abhors chaos as she sees it. I usually do the Friday Fictioneers, but a few of the same folk do this one too! Good photo by the way where was it?
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Ah, I see! Thanks for explaining! And this was taken at Belvedere Castle in Central Park (NY) 🙂
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Never been out in America, I was confined to LAX for 10 hours once; it’s on the list!
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An excellent debut, gives birth to a lot of questions!
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Thank you, usually I do the Friday Fictioneers in which I make things funny, serious is the new funny!
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Why is Brenda reacting in a way she is reacting? Curious!
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She sees chaos in the steps and the disorder in The pane of glass, it freaks her out…
Maybe…
Or it could be something completely different!
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OK. Thanks for explaining.
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Seems like he is more scared of Brenda’s reaction rather than the damage he has done. Good take.
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There is something a little worrying about Brenda. Great debut – see you over at FF!
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Opens up a lot of questions 🙂
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It does doesn’t it? I’ll leave the answers to the imagination
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As others have said – Brenda is a worry! Poor Colin has his work cut out with that one! 🙂
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Thanks for reading, mucho appreciated
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My pleasure
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For ‘stream of consciousness,’ this was rather coherent! Well done!
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Thank you, I was going to try again today but time ran out!
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